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I will write a serious Haiku.
No fun and games here.


All critique/poems (c) 2010 Niall Mitchell. All rights reserved except permission is granted to the original poster to use the critique/poem in conjunction with the critiqued image as long as the statement "Text (c) 2010 Niall  Mitchell" accompanies the image and text.

Jan 14 10 07:36 pm Link

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Annie RS

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Jan 14 10 07:38 pm Link

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Nemi

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I like this game.
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Jan 14 10 07:40 pm Link

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Annie RS wrote:
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desire hunts victims
in revealing light, stalks its
prey without mercy

Jan 14 10 08:07 pm Link

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Nemi Bea wrote:
I like this game.
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no blue the skyless
forest shows, indistinct blurs
a nymph surrounded

Jan 14 10 08:11 pm Link

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turned away reeling
unresolved heartache stealing
joy: stone heart floating

Jan 14 10 09:09 pm Link

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I was amazed by
her modeling skill, later
learned her pain was real

Jan 14 10 09:20 pm Link

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Jan 15 10 03:04 pm Link

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Morgan Barbour wrote:
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a parade of one
among drying dying grass
pink: defiant gaze

Jan 16 10 09:14 am Link

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JeanDphoto

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Knowlton, Quebec, Canada

Very curious :-)

Please...

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Thank You !

Jan 16 10 09:27 am Link

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JeanD wrote:
Very curious :-)

Please...

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Thank You !

cut off and locked out,
after struggling to reach it:
glass sphere's prison wall

Jan 16 10 09:37 am Link

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JeanDphoto

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Knowlton, Quebec, Canada

Excellent reading... this was actualy the theme we were exploring !

Kudos

Jean

Jan 16 10 09:42 am Link